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Huntik13 on 22nd Jan 2021, 11:00 PM

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"Split the Scourge"? Wait a second, does that mean Taavi only has a portion of Scourge or all of it? I'm still surprised the Lords are actually being so honest with their information...I'm getting a bad feeling...

SILGHT ERRORS: There's a lot of awkward phrasing on the this page. I'll break it down as simple as I can.

In the first panel, change "And where do..." to "And HOW do..."

In Nox's speech bubble, change the first part to " We need to divide the Scourge to handle its massive power."

In the second part, rewrite it like "Through experiments, we found out that elf-humans have an affinity with it."


In the third panel, Ven's speech bubble need to be rephrase, try changing it to "Are you saying that you are keeping a potential threat with no idea how it works or how dangerous it is?

In fourth panel, change "deadly" to "fatally".

Ink-Mix Studio on 23rd Jan 2021, 12:20 AM

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Taavi has all of it. For now, Nox is only telling how the Scourge ended up in the box.
Thank you again, Huntik13!!

Huntik13 on 23rd Jan 2021, 5:23 AM

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All of it, huh? Taavi is lucky to be alive, that's for sure...

You're welcome! ^-^