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Huntik13 on 15th Jul 2020, 1:48 AM

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So sweet! Khedri acts like a big brother Taavi and I'm really glad he's looking out for him! ^-^

SLIGHT ERRORS: First speech bubble, add a period after "Lineage", so a new sentence will start with "We". That is a run-on sentence.

Second speech bubble, tweak the sentence so it will read "And Norden killed that clan of Cerins and is now after you."

In the third panel, the sentence will flow better if written like this: "Sometimes, we don't know those around us as well as we think..."

Ink-Mix Studio on 15th Jul 2020, 10:15 AM

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Thank you, Huntik13! <3

Huntik13 on 16th Jul 2020, 1:13 AM

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You're welcome! ^-^

Huntik13 on 16th Jul 2020, 1:14 AM

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Also, you forget the accent in Norden's name and the the word "Cerins"!

Ink-Mix Studio on 16th Jul 2020, 1:40 AM

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Ops! XD Thanks again!